Fallen In A Hole (A Balassi Stanza)
Posted: Thursday, June 11, 2009
by David Pekrul
The Balassi Stanza is named after the Hungarian Balint Balassi. The stanza that bears his name rhymes BBACCADDA with syllable counts 667667667. The following poem is my attempt at writing a Balassi Stanza.
Fallen In A Hole
A tortured, anguished soul,
Has fallen in a hole,
And now he starts to panic,
With no one there to help,
Or hear his painful yelp,
He's getting rather frantic,
Whatever can he do?
I think his days are through,
He's stuck in dirt, organic.
He's clawing at the sides,
Not making any strides,
The hole keeps getting bigger,
With every scoop of dirt,
His body starts to hurt,
And he becomes a digger,
But almost out of air,
With nothing much to spare,
He's running out of vigor.
They found him much too late,
With death his final state,
Now they can only bury,
It's such a tragic end,
And hard to comprehend,
Now they are very wary,
Of walking in the hills,
And having these same spills,
And ending up like Larry.
If this article is used in any publication, please send a copy of the publication to David Pekrul at
E-Mail: dpekrul@gmail.com
Has fallen in a hole,
And now he starts to panic,
With no one there to help,
Or hear his painful yelp,
He's getting rather frantic,
Whatever can he do?
I think his days are through,
He's stuck in dirt, organic.
Not making any strides,
The hole keeps getting bigger,
With every scoop of dirt,
His body starts to hurt,
And he becomes a digger,
But almost out of air,
With nothing much to spare,
He's running out of vigor.
They found him much too late,
With death his final state,
Now they can only bury,
It's such a tragic end,
And hard to comprehend,
Now they are very wary,
Of walking in the hills,
And having these same spills,
And ending up like Larry.
If this article is used in any publication, please send a copy of the publication to David Pekrul at
E-Mail: dpekrul@gmail.com
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Top-level comments on this article: (2 total)Very well done! Sad and yet morbidly funny. You are having a great influence on quite a few writers on SW. I see more and more poetry! Nicely done!Thanks Teresa,Yea, I've seen more poetry on the site also; that's kind of cool.
Hi David.The Balassi Stanza is a very interesting style. I would like to learn more and read more about this. Thank you for a very interesting poem and thank you for sharing your knowledge.Best regards,NenitaI'm glad you liked this one, Nenita. I hope you'll give it a try and see how you do writing one.Hi David.Thank you.Does it have to be three stanzas and nine lines each?I will be looking forward for your critique.Best regards,NenitaHi Nenita,Sorry for the delay in this response. In answer to your question, there needs to be only one stanza. I kind of got carried away with this poem and needed three stanzas to complete my story.The stanza you write must match the format described at the beginning of my article.Good luck with your Balassi Stanza. If you write one, be sure to submit it to SW.Hi David.Thank you for your response regarding my inquiry about the Balassi Stanza. I appreciate your encouragement. You and your work inspires me, thanks for sharing your knowledge.Blessings.Nenita
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